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Sometimes, when I look up
into the morning sun, I wonder
if you’re looking at it too.
And when it starts to rain
I hope it’s never on your parade
and I wish that I could be there
to hold an umbrella over your head.
When the moonlight kisses
my window goodnight, I pray that soon
I’ll be able to do the same, to feel your lips
pressed against mine in a warm embrace.
When I fall asleep, I dream of you
of your beautiful face, and even
the sweetest dream can never compare
to hearing your voice first thing in the morning.
Even when we’re separated by so much distance
it’s what makes me sleep easy, knowing
that you’ll be there on the other end of the phone line
to say, “Good morning,” and to let me know
that you’re looking at the same sun, the same clouds
the same blue skies, and thinking the same thing:
I love you.
©2008-2009 ~shinogami
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Author's Comments

This is a poem I wrote for the new lady in my life...her name is Julia, and she's in Philadelphia while I'm here in CT, which is a distance that while manageable is hard to deal with on a day to day basis. I met her at College Orientation, in case anyone is concerned...I'll probably post up the whole story in a Journal Entry sometime in the coming week. The only things I dislike about this poem is the title and the final line--I felt as if the title needed to be better, and I don't know if the last line is really necessary. Let me know what y'all think though, and thanks for reading!

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Keep the last line, but i agree with you saying that you want to change the title. Maybe... Sometime I Wonder ? =)
i loved the poem; I know how you feel =D

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"Well, maybe it is a bit early for me to, proclaim my love for you" -Ben (Secret Life) :heart:
:love: : :library: :blackrose: :sing: :music: :jester:
also known as ~bulldogtia
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Thanks very much for the critique--I do feel that the last line is necessary as I read it again, but I do like your title suggestion, I'll certainly mull it over
thanks again!

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"When a true genius appears in the world, you may know him by this sign, that the dunces are all in confederacy against him.
-Jonathan Swift "Thoughts on Various Subjects Moral and Diverting""A Confederacy of Dunces" by John Kennedy O'Toole
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I also always think my poems need better titles and closing lines, but this one is kinda good....fits to my situation a small bit, the only thing is I am not so... girlish, obviously, XD
:iconms-mmh:
you're greatly welcome =) i really do love your poem =D

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"Well, maybe it is a bit early for me to, proclaim my love for you" -Ben (Secret Life) :heart:
:love: : :library: :blackrose: :sing: :music: :jester:
also known as ~bulldogtia
:iconshinogami:
I'm not really sure if you're trying to make fun of me by calling me girlish or if you just mean I'm over emotional--if that's what you meant, then yes, I am very emotional, but I don't think that makes me girlish.
Thanks for the comment though, glad to know you enjoyed it

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"When a true genius appears in the world, you may know him by this sign, that the dunces are all in confederacy against him.
-Jonathan Swift "Thoughts on Various Subjects Moral and Diverting""A Confederacy of Dunces" by John Kennedy O'Toole
:iconshinogami:
haha well that's good to know--Julia certainly enjoyed it, which was my main aim besides just writing something worthwhile

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"When a true genius appears in the world, you may know him by this sign, that the dunces are all in confederacy against him.
-Jonathan Swift "Thoughts on Various Subjects Moral and Diverting""A Confederacy of Dunces" by John Kennedy O'Toole
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oh I never said I enjoyed it :D
:iconshinogami:
you're a very odd bird, as the saying goes--have I ever told you that?

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"When a true genius appears in the world, you may know him by this sign, that the dunces are all in confederacy against him.
-Jonathan Swift "Thoughts on Various Subjects Moral and Diverting""A Confederacy of Dunces" by John Kennedy O'Toole
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better odd than stinking normal :D

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