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The robin beats its wing
catches the draft, pinwheels across,
past the trees, past the mousy white clouds
that run across the floorboards of the sky.
And as I watch it rise, it’s red chest,
like a single star brought out against the night,
I imagine your face, and then
I am contented, even when farther away
than the robin that catches the draft.
©2008-2009 ~shinogami
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This came about whilst I was walking home from work a few days ago and sort-of pondering on the new lady in my life. Enjoy it, and let me know what you all think!

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:iconms-mmh:
awww; you love her!!! =D its so pretty and delicate =D
i think u may have added a few extra words that make it not make sense (get tht??? =p), but other than that, its really pretty =D

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"Well, maybe it is a bit early for me to, proclaim my love for you" -Ben (Secret Life) :heart:
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yeah that happens to me quite often in both poetry and prose that I write--I tend to get flowery/overly wordy. I can't catch it right now (as I read it again) but I'm sure when I look over it again in the coming weeks and months I'll pick up on where exactly you're talking about.
Thanks though, glad to know you enjoyed it

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"When a true genius appears in the world, you may know him by this sign, that the dunces are all in confederacy against him.
-Jonathan Swift "Thoughts on Various Subjects Moral and Diverting""A Confederacy of Dunces" by John Kennedy O'Toole
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Very beautiful. I love the imagery and how you relate it to your love being far away.

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